Post by Itsunawa Keiji on Apr 8, 2008 20:01:16 GMT -5
My friend wrote a story and I want to know what you guys think of it I'll explain the story later because its kinda confusing. It was written by a guy by the way. I'm copying straight from it so ignore errors please
Once there was a noble hero who only wanted what was best for others. This hero never witnessed his potential until his ninth year in school. This hero decided that he would help the school in one way, become president. As this hero's reputation increased he gained many enemies. Now as everybody knows every hero has an ultimate enemy. His greatest enemy was one to this very day that he still could not beat, himself. Because of his dark side he lost everything that was dear to him. Even with the smallest mistake, his dark side would make this hero beat himself up. At first he was able to control the darkness until he came across an evil girl. Because of his foolish emotions he fell for this girl now knowing about her evil ways. The longer he left himself vulnerable fr the darkness to find his way out. The evil mistress did everything in her power to make our hero mad. One day his darkness came and saw the light. At that moment his dark side knew that seeing the light was only temporary, so he did his worst and made our hero lose most of his friends. Then when all hope was lost a princess came and saved him. She knew a lot about him and he wanted to know about her. Soon they became the best of friends, so he shared everything with her. She meant the whole world to him and she still does. When the hero finally believed that he was fine, he again underestimated his darkness until he broke free. He promised nothing bad will happen to the princess. Finally the darkness over powered our hero when he lost a close friend. Now his darkness is finally free and the hero has no chance at winning.
A Hero's Darkness
Once there was a noble hero who only wanted what was best for others. This hero never witnessed his potential until his ninth year in school. This hero decided that he would help the school in one way, become president. As this hero's reputation increased he gained many enemies. Now as everybody knows every hero has an ultimate enemy. His greatest enemy was one to this very day that he still could not beat, himself. Because of his dark side he lost everything that was dear to him. Even with the smallest mistake, his dark side would make this hero beat himself up. At first he was able to control the darkness until he came across an evil girl. Because of his foolish emotions he fell for this girl now knowing about her evil ways. The longer he left himself vulnerable fr the darkness to find his way out. The evil mistress did everything in her power to make our hero mad. One day his darkness came and saw the light. At that moment his dark side knew that seeing the light was only temporary, so he did his worst and made our hero lose most of his friends. Then when all hope was lost a princess came and saved him. She knew a lot about him and he wanted to know about her. Soon they became the best of friends, so he shared everything with her. She meant the whole world to him and she still does. When the hero finally believed that he was fine, he again underestimated his darkness until he broke free. He promised nothing bad will happen to the princess. Finally the darkness over powered our hero when he lost a close friend. Now his darkness is finally free and the hero has no chance at winning.
